Hi Jeremy,
I like this new banner heading very much. Here are some ideas that might improve it even more:
Try this color adjustment and see if you like the results any better (that is, of course, if your clients will allow it):
Lighten the blue-green background to the lightest aqua color that is visible in the sail in the picture. That will tie the photograph and the banner together (from a design standpoint). It will also allow the gold letters to stand out more..the problem is that the blue-green and the gold are very close in value. See if it doesn't look better.
Or..here's another idea...maybe you could add a very small "stroke" to the gold text so it will stand out more?
Also, "fabric architecture" doesn't seem to stand out enough...what if it were larger, or bolder, etc?
Experiment with it just a tad.
But overall, I think the change is definitely positive. I like it!
Nanci
Nanci's Necklaces
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