www.bali-travel.com need your review, please

gusbali · #1 (**permalink**) 11-22-2003, 09:10 AM

I just updated my website http://www.bali-travel.com
Please review it and let me know.

Thanks

info202 · #2 (**permalink**) 11-22-2003, 02:20 PM

your site looks good... you probably could use a little more informational text on the index page... it navigates easily
your biggest problem is your English and sentence structure... I realize that English might not be your first language, but you need to find someone who is proficient in grammar, syntax, etx to go over the site and correct errors.
Also... I don't think your slogan is memorable (in addition to needing some syntax corrections)

just a bit more work on the English and the site will be very good....

amberstar702 · #3 (**permalink**) 11-22-2003, 03:19 PM

Your website offers concise information about your subject and Bali looks like a great place for a vacation. However, as mentioned by Mary Ann, grammar and sentence structure need work. I would have that done as soon as possible.
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gusbali · #4 (**permalink**) 11-23-2003, 07:04 AM

Thank you for your review.
I will fix it right away. I have American freinds, I think they can help me.

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