Hi, there,
I just found this wonderful forum today. I read some contents here and they are really good.

I just developed a website. The address is
http://www.successbizcenter.com

My goal is to introduce the affordable internet business opportunities to anyone who wants to start an Online business with limited budget.

I know my site is not as good as the sites posted here. I little hesitated to ask for your review since I feel a kind of embrassed because of low design skills. But I do want to improve my site. So I still want to ask for a review.

I very appreciate your feedback.

-Julia

This is the type of ad you'd see in "Get Rich" ads. The ones which spend an entire page saying exactly nothing about what the program is about.

I had absolutely no interest in the video, due to the currency you request. What currecy you ask? Time. Think of download time as a micro payment you are asking users to make.

This may do better with a certain crowd. But I've seem much better ad/sites of this type. These are mostly print moved to screen. And I think, to eventually become really sucessful, a new format will have to be developed.

Let me qualify this by saying I like some good DR TV spots and (few) of the sites associated with them. I have the "swipe file" copy writers should; and swap rare material with some heavy hitters in the field.

Something happens to the mind when moving even the expertly done stuff onto the web. And it isn't good. The creativeness these ordinarily inventive and astute people demonstrate offline simply goes out the window. Forget fear of regulation by the FCC, the web may eventually end up more properly regulated by the FDA.

Since the "site" or ad didn't provide any information at any point, I became disinterested quickly. This type of site really needs expert copywriting to even have a ghost of a chance. Set this against a backdrop of heavy competition, and the site comes up more than a little short. The copy was uninteresting and vague to an extreme which fairly shouts "watch out."

Sigh. It needs more than that. Most professionals *I* know would steer completely clear of a site like this. All fluff, no substance, no credibility, nothing that distinguishes it from any other "if you haven't figured out that it's not 1997 anymore, you can get rich on the Internet with my program" get-rich-quick pitch. Expert copywriting only reveals natural service quality; it doesn't create it. Putting makeup on a pig only annoys the pig and makes the other villagers move to better neighborhoods.

Julia, nothing personal, and I wish you the best.. but this has been done before, and it's being done way too often. Anyone who uses phrases like "We will NOT give you hundreds of money making opportunities which you will totally get lost in the 'InterNet'" should learn a bit more about the market conditions they're fighting.

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Hi, there,

I very appreciate your sincere input for my website. I do not intend to promote some get-rich-quick program. But looks like my web copy gives such impression to people which scares people away.

So if I want to truly promote a good Internet business, how should I do? What approach is better? Right now, looks like the "sales copy" is not a good start. Should I put the company's products line on the web so reader can know what's inside before they join in the program?

My intension is to help people to get started an Internet business with a good program. The target audience is for those who never involved any internet business. Help people to shorten the learning curve and avoid to waste money to some bad programs. I will gather good valuable information -a kind of education contents online for readers.

So based on my intension, what should I do so visitors will not get wrong impression?

Thank you very much for your feedback!

-Julia

Try selling your business as a an investment. A small investment but be honest... most users know that it will take some work to make something successful. Stay away from lines like "best business ever" and "make money in no time" and that kind of crap... that stuff screams rip-off and scam.

being honest will make people realize the programs value and the value of your site. be detailed and let them know what they are getting into. the more blind your user is to what is ahead...the less likely they are to continue.

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