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Old 02-24-2004, 10:26 PM
dougpiano2 dougpiano2 is offline
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Default Too well written - to much write on index page

Hi Folks:

I must agree that the text on your opening page is long, involved, and difficult to get thru. May I suggest that you incorporate the text for each product on the product page itself - and pare down the amount of text. As Sgt. Joe Friday once said: "Just the facts". I know writing text for a site can be frustrating, from experience I know - and I am a copywriter. Boil it down, smooth it out. As for the colours - I personally like em - they look sharp. Overall a good site.

dougpiano2