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Old 12-21-2008, 02:11 AM
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Default Re: Titanium ring logo

“Have you ever considered having alternative metal inlaid Titanium wedding rings? Pewter, Bronze, Copper, Tin - we can do it! Just ask”.

I think “Have you ever considered having alternative metal inlaid Titanium wedding rings?” does not read as well as it might: “have” and “having” so close in the same sentence; and the sense of “metal inlaid Titanium wedding rings”.

So, here is a suggestion: “Ever considered alternative-metal, inlaid, Titanium wedding rings?”

Regards, David.
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