Re: Can you please review my blog?
I do not mean to offend anyone but who wrote your content? I personally found it unreadable and very unprofessional.
First your tag line.
Let's discuss what it takes to start internet business - Step by Step guide to extend business online
Should be.
Let's discuss what it takes to start an internet business - Step by Step guide to extend your business online.
Your first paragraph
I’ll be posting series of articles on how to kick-start internet business from scratch. I am unable to do it now because I am loaded with few other important commitments, please apologies. If you are a first time visitor I encourage you to bookmark my site (Control + D) or join RSS feeds or (enter your email address on the extreme right bar) to keep yourself updated.
Should be.
I’ll be posting a series of articles on how to kick-start an internet business from scratch. I am unable to do so now because I am loaded down with a few other important commitments, Please accept my apology. If you are a first time visitor I encourage you to bookmark my site (Control + D) or join RSS feeds or (enter your email address on the extreme right bar) to keep yourself updated.
What's highlighted in orange:
1. Too many "or".
2. Where is there a place to add an email address?
3. A sentence should read normal if you read it without reading what is in the parenthesis.
I stopped reading after that.
Next:
Your internet business is plain and clear. You make money from Google ad sense. Maybe this is why you have it ABOVE your categories. That is a clear indication of a person putting ad sense before their visitors.
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