Please keep in mind that this critique is meant to be constructive.

From a Flash viewpoint. The presentation is very typical.

I didn't have any idea of what your product or service is and after viewing it, I still don't.
This may just be that I am not familar to your field.

The intro seems to be all fluff and cries out for a "Skip Intro" button.

Best of Luck.

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